BEECHMOUNT - 1ST ROUGH CUT

Q3. Here is our first rough cut, from this trailer we gained some audience feedback from our peers in order to improve our soap opera trailer. Firstly many peers stated that the soundtrack didnt fit. We were aware that the sound track was a poor quailty however we were going to buy the track off itunes and then change it over however from our feedback we have decided that we need to get a new soundtrack which has more meaning and gives the audience understanding of the trailer.

Secondly we were given feedback that some of the shots were unneccessary and some in the wrong order making the trailer not make sense. Shots such as the blackberry phone ringing is unclear as the audience do not know who is holding the phone and also character names havnt been established in the trailer. This could be improved by us having a character introduction at the start of every episode so the audience are familiar with the characters from the very first episode. If we was to create this it would contain each character separately with a title card with there name on. The characters would do something which would then represent them throughout the show. For exmaple, Jack (Gary) Could play with his hair to emphasise his character as being homosexual.

Shots that were in the wrong order are the shot of Sophie (Roche) and Jake (Spencer) in the park as it then goes back to them in the house and there first one night stand. This confuses the audience as then it goes back to being in the park so the happening/tense of scenes occuring is unclear. From this feedback we are aware that we need to change this and make the trailer run in chronological order.

Finally another area for improvement is title cards. Many of our peers have mentioned that if we had title cards throughout the trailer as well as at the end the storyline would be clearer. I think this is a very good way to improve our trailer because although it will make sense of the trailer it will also build up suspense.